Character Types
I wrote these two scenes, which have the same scenarios but with different character types. Which one do you like better?
She stood gazing at the crimson sunset across the mountains. She let out a sigh, tossed her auburn-streaked hair back, and weakly smiled.
She spun around to proceed back inside, only to her surprise he stood staring at her. His eyes caught hers, but she couldn’t let him see inside hers. She nodded but had to turn away. She hurried to the kitchen.
She sucked in the fresh evening air and stood for a moment gazing at the mountain sunset before her. She swiftly turned around but was surprised to find him standing behind her. His eyes reached hers. She smiled. He smiled.
“What is up, my knight?” she asked playfully.
“All is well, my lady, except there have been several reports of a certain princess’s beauty striking many a person dead.” He took her hand with a wink of his eye.